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托福写作拿满分难吗

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想拿托福写作满分有多难?托福写作部分常常是很多考生失分惨重的一块,很多考生会对托福写作考试心生畏惧,那么托福写作为什么难拿满分呢,今天小编就给大家分析一下。

托福写作拿满分难吗

托福写作拿满分难吗?

首先我们来看一下ETS给出托福写作的评分标准:

综合写作评分标准

1.内容的完整性和准确性。简单地说就是文章是否有将讲座中的关键信息点完整、准确地提取出来(通常情况下有三点),并和阅读材料中的相关内容有效地一一对应。

2.文章的组织机构,词汇和语法的正确性和准确性。

独立写作评分标准

(1)有效回应题目,阐明文章主题。

(2).逻辑条理清楚,论证充分展开。

(3)内容连贯一致,衔接自然流畅。

(4)遣词造句地道,语言驾驭娴熟。

这就是托福写作(综合写作和独立写作)两部分的评分标准,根据多年考试培训和教学经验总结,我认为考生在托福写作考试中常见的问题有以下几点:

一.逻辑匮乏

连贯地把一个观点言之成理地表达出来,是完成任何写作任务的第一要务,在英文写作中尤其要注意两点,第一不要被辞藻的华美和句式的复杂绕进去了,英文应该以几个关键词为骨架,再以此为基础进行增删修饰,所以不要文过饰非让自己的表达片段化;第二尤其要注意平行论点之间是否有重叠、交叉的地方,同时要注意事实,结果和基准之间是否处在一条直线上,是否在逻辑上具有一致性。

二.论据意识不强

托福写作评分标准当中对于“事实和论据”有着明确的要求,“口水话”是任何应试型写作的大忌。论据的积累事实上也应该成为重要一环,多积累可以信手拈来的材料;而事实论据也是大有文章可做的,最可靠的是数字,对数字的敏感度的培养应该从小开始,不能成为短板;其次是概括性的事实;最后要强调的是具体事例,此处必须明确的一点是具体事例写作绝对不等同把个人经历做成流水账,而是要加以概括。

三.遣词造句不地道

托福的阅卷人不知道看过多少篇以 “with the development of society”(随着社会的发展)开头的作文,这种毫无个人创建的模板化也只能保证一个更加平庸的分数。其次玩弄大词不用小词,不区分书面语和口语,都是由于平时不阅读,不积累所造成的。

四.冗余现象严重

如果我们试着把一段中文翻译成英文,再把这段译文和典范的英文进行对比,就可以发现大多数人的翻译都要比典范英文长一截。这恰恰是写作刚刚入门,又无法达到精通程度的学生最容易遇到的问题。英文写作的原则应该是“less is more”,写得精炼远远好于长篇大论,如若英文写作要从中低端迈入高端,这背后需要调动介词,比如“otherwise”这种介词,80%的学生都不会用,或者害怕用;此外把从句以合成词的方式的呈现出来,用上data-driven这样的结构,此处不一一赘述。

托福独立写作范文:认识的人搬到你所在的城市

A person you know is planning to move to your town or city. What do you think this person would like and dislike about living in your town or city? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

Recently one of my friends will move to Shanghai from New ZeAland and she asked me which aspects she might not adapt in Shanghai. I think that it is as follows:

Firstly, she may think that the air pollution is very severe in Shanghai. As everyone knows that New Zealand is a developed country known for its beautiful natural environment. There are fewer industry plants in New Zealand than in Shanghai. So New Zealand is a very clean and beautiful country, just like a garden. However, in Shanghai the air pollution is still out of control. When you come back home from your company every day, you will find that your shoes are covered with dusts.

What is more, my friend may find that the streets in Shanghai is very croweded with traffic. The population of Shanghai is 13 million, which is much more than that of New Zealand. She might find uncomfortable travelling in the streets of Shanghai During rush hours.

Finally, I think that she may complain about some other small things about Shanghai. For examplem suppose she walks on the pavement and will find that there are too many bicycles parked on it which block the sidewalk. Sometimes she has to walk on the street. I think having lived in New Zealand for a long time, these small things in Shanghai may bewilder her.

In a word, I think that my friend will dislike the air pollution, crowded transportation and other aspects of Shanghai. As a Shanghaiese, I think we all should try our best to make Shanghai a better place to live in the future.

托福独立写作范文:一些国家在校生去工作

In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.

I don't think it is a good idea for teenagers to have jobs while they are still students. It can interfere with their studies, it can disrupt their home life, and it takes away pan of their childhood that they can never replace.

Education today is very complex and difficult. In order to learn and get good grades, a student must work very hard and concentrate. This means attending classes from early in the morning until late afternoon, then doing research for projects, then going home and doing homework. It's a busy schedule for anyone. For someone trying to hold down a job, it's even harder. Students need all their energy for their studies. If they're working after class at night, they're going to be tired the next day. They won't be able to concentrate. This will have a negative impact on their learning, and eventually on their grades.

Having a job can also disrupt a teenager's home life. Families spend less and less time together. If a teenager has a job to go to after school, he won't be home for dinner. He won't be home after dinner, either, and may not get home until late at night. This means he doesn't have a lot of time to spend with his family. If he doesn't have a car, it can mean changes in his parents' schedules, too.

They have to drive him to work and pick him up.

The main drawback of a teenager having a job while he's still a student is that he's missing out on the fun of being young. He has a whole lifetime in which he'll have to earn a living. This is the last free time he'll have. It's the last chance he'll have to hang out with friends and just enjoy himself. Soon enough he'll have to worry about paying the rent and buying food.

Jobs bring money, but money isn't everything. A teenager with a job gives up too much. No one should spend all his time at work, and especially not a teenager.

托福独立写作范文:大型购物中心建在你家附近

It has recently been announced that a large shopping center may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

There are both advantages and disadvantages of establishing a shopping mall in our neighborhood. I am worried about traffic and how it will affect our community. However, I believe it will benefit local business and increase appreciations for local area. All in all, I think it is a good idea.

For those what I am worried about, traffic congestion and parking problem are obverse. First of all, traffic congestion is always a concern when building something new. Our streets are narrow, with parking on both sides. A shopping center will certainly bring more traffic than ever before, and heavy traffic means big congestion. At the same time, parking is also a problem in this e are few garages attached to houses. Most of residents depend on finding spaces on the street for parking. If a shopping mall is build, we must compete with customers and patrons for those parking spaces. Furthermore, if the shopping center offers valet parking service, it would be even worse because valet parking works in terms to grab every possible spaces available in street.

On the other hand, building up a shopping center will give this neighborhood more opportunities and benefits. Residents in this area could certainly take the job that shopping center offers. People would earn more money and spend on other business, such as entertainment and education, which are operating in our neighborhood or adjacent communities. As a result, not only local business but also inter-community business boosts up and a prodigious amount of fortune will be accumulated to our neighborhood. A shopping center can also attract people to visit our community. When they drive to the shopping center, they will see what a nice place this area is to live. Therefore, we would have an increasing number of residents in the next couple of years. It is very important to introduce new numbers because we have lost many residents to suburbs during recent years.

In a short, there are several details to consider when planning a shopping center. In my part, I support to have a new shopping center in my community because its advantages outweigh disadvantages.

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